RFR [17]: JDK-8260310 Release Note: Configurable extensions with system properties

[Jamil Nimeh]

Hi Xuelei, looks good overall, some minor suggestions only:

  * 1st paragraph: Change "...block extensions used in client side" and
    "...used to block extensions used in server side" to say "...used in
    the client." and "...used in the server." (you can remove the "side"
    words).
  * 1st paragraph: if you use "neither" then you should follow it with
    "nor" rather than "or"
  * The 3rd paragraph's leading sentence is a fragment.  You might be
    able to remove that sentence entirely without changing the meaning
    behind the paragraph.  With that first sentence removed and the
    "But" from the next sentence also omitted I think it reads a little
    more smoothly, at least to my eyes.
  * I'm not sure if we have any style guide rules concerning
    contractions in release notes, but I think changing "don't" -> "do
    not" also reads better for these kinds of things.

--Jamil

On 1/29/2021 4:23 PM, Xue-Lei Fan wrote:
> Hi,
>
> May I have the following release note reviewed:
> https://bugs.openjdk.java.net/browse/JDK-8260310 
> <https://bugs.openjdk.java.net/browse/JDK-8260310>
>
>
> Thanks,
> Xuelei
>
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